Character 1/4 Shadowpaw

[streamclaw]

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Shadowpaw - Shadowclan - Apprentice

OOC -

First Name: Zach
Characters: Shadowpaw(Shadowclan), Streamkit(Riverclan), Silvercloud(Thunderclan), Arcicpelt(Windclan)
RP Experience/Level: Beginner


IC -

Name: Shadowpaw

Age: Almost old enough to become a warrior

Gender: Male

Alliance: ShadowClan

Rank: Apprentice

Appearance: All black with deep blue eyes. X shaped scar on nose right between the eyes. Large ears. Small compared to the average cat.

Personality: Very mischievious and fond of trouble. Physically strong, but emotionally fragile.Despises Bloodclan, yet idolizes Scourge. Experienced with hunting, tracking, fighting, and stalker.Because of his past, he can understand other cats' pain. He is often rebellious to his senior and peer cats. Stress has a great influence on his mood. Loves to pick fights with any cat he disagrees with.

History: Father is Darkclaw, Mother is Shadefur. His parents were exiled from Shadowclan shortly after Shadowpaw became an apprentice. Shadowpaw went with them. They joined Bloodclan. Bloodclan killed Shadowpaw's parents, due to their belief in Starclan. This is due to the fact that Starclan did not exist to Bloodclan. Shadowpaw's parents told him to go back to Shadowclan. This had saved Shadowclaw's life. He was welcomed back to Shadowclan. Even so, some cats question his loyalty.

Role playing: One cold night, when Shadowclaw had snuck out of camp, he had stared into the stars of Silverpelt. He was looking for his parents in that stream of starlight, hoping that his parents had found a place to rest among Starclan. As he wondered, he remembered that dreadful day. The day Bloodclan killed his parents. Remembering his parents last words, "Shadowclaw, go back to Shadowclan. That is your only chance for survival. Leave now!". Shadowclaw's first response was starring dumbfounded by his parents as they lay on the ground with cuts, scratches, and bites. Shadowclaw finally said, "What about you two?". Shadowclaw's parents looked at him and smiled, " Physically, our wounds are too grave for survival, but when we pass, we will look over you from Starclan. As long as you let us, we will always be in your heart!" They then gave a last breath and then layed still as a rock. Shadowclaw quickly mourned his parents' passing, then ran. Their last wish was his survival. He turned around, hoping to see two black faces smiling at him, but instead saw two lifeless bodies. That memory stuck in his head like it was yesterday. He heard a strict voice, "Shadowpaw, return to camp!" Muttering under his breath, Shadowpaw obeyed.
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[fαllεη •]

Welcome to the site, Streamclaw :) I would love to accept Shadowpaw, but unfortunately there are just a few things that need fixing first.

First off, when it says 'use the layout for your title', it means that that should be what's in your subject line --so when you hit 'modify' at the top of the post, the new subject of the thread should read exactly as you've written it --but in the subject line, not the message box :)

Second, I would feel much better about accepting Shadowpaw if you could use full sentences when describing him. Instead of 'All black...' try 'Shadowpaw is an entirely black apprentice with deep blue eyes'. This makes your bio much more of a pleasure to read and is more grammatically correct :).
(As a note: when copying the form, please copy it from the dark brown box so that all the UBBC comes with it. This'll format your bio properly :))

Just a few basic points, Stream (I'll give this a proper read-through later but I'm making a cat for WindClan at the moment ;).

First off, when it says 'use the layout for your title', it means that that should be what's in your subject line --so Shadowpaw's subject should read exactly as you've written it there :)

Second, when copying the form you need to copy it from the dark brown box so that all the UBBC comes with it. This'll format your bio properly :)